The Fire Within by Racquel Kechagias.
Vampire Victor is lonely. He strikes a deal with a dude he just met, offering to make the man a king in exchange for the man’s as-yet-unthought-of-future-daughter’s hand in marriage. The man agrees and to seal the deal, Victor turns the man’s X-chromosome-carrying sperm into a Horcrux so that the man’s daughter’s soul will partially be Victor’s soul, binding them together forever.
Seriously, that’s what he does. It isn’t so eloquently worded in the book, but that’s what he does.
Something like two decades pass and Victor finally meets Anna. He has to fight some dude named Christian, who is also wanting to marry her, and Anna picks Victor because she can’t seem to resist him—she later learns it’s because her soul is partially his, and while she hates that idea for all of two seconds, she soon forgets about it and accepts that she should like him…even though she knows she lacks free will because of him.
Also, we get almost an entire quarter of the way into the book before we learn that the world is full of vampires, Fae, Mer-folk, Shape-shifters, etc., and everyone knows about them. Absolutely no mention of this before then. We know Victor the Vampire, and otherwise the world seems realistic, and then we’re in a completely-fantasy world.
I would have enjoyed this book a lot more if there hadn’t been a war breaking out and a million POVs. The plot is all over the place. Despite my dislike of the romance parts of the book, it really should have stayed with the romance parts. Everything else was too much, too busy, too random.
And, oh, the typos! The errors! Simple mistakes, like using “breath” when it should be “breathe,” appear a few hundred times throughout the story. Minute/minuet, who/whom, woman/women, etc. Commas are neglected, big time. Names are overused in dialogue (while not technically an error, it’s so jarring). Things are repeated far too frequently. It’s just…unedited, amateurish writing.
Would you like a sample?
“Anna I love you but you need to know. I’m a few hundred years old Anna and I didn’t want to live another hundred years without someone to love, without someone to care for. I chose you before you were even born but I didn’t know I would love you as much as I do. You’re my world now Anna.” –Victor the Vampire, The Fire Within, Racquel Kechagias.
Questions go unanswered, subplots are dropped completely… Editors aren’t that hard to find.
2/5 GR stars, pretty much only for Meg, Shade, and Kayden.
Posted from my phone, so please excuse extra typos! ESJ